Part of the reading in this session covers the revision process. Look at the feedback that you instructor has given you on your first paper. How can you apply it to future papers? Take this time to ask your instructor for any clarification regarding their comments                 

Here are two things to focus on:

1. In the introduction paragraph, you have a good overview of the three goals, though add an additional final sentence to the paragraph that ties all three together (this will be your thesis statement).

2. Avoid having the narrative refer to itself (omit phrases such as, “In this paper I will…” or “I have discussed”, etc. Typically, it’s cleaner to just make the statement.

Please see the rubric and in-text comments (in the blue boxes) for feedback and a breakdown of the awarded points.